I edited the short story i wrote yesterday, read it please?

I think u should stretch it out, because this a bit intricate for a short story. but it sounds really good. oh, and u can type the real curse words, because it's a story. you are supposed to. if u don't want to type that, use one of the other "better" words for them. u rn't supposed to have **** instead of "shoot" in a story.